Childrens story

[Bjornita]

Don't worry, seppuku would be perfectly fine for 3rd graders...

Just use a lot of context clues.

The sword entered his gut with an audible squish, and after his stomach joined his intestines on the floor of his room, the pain was stopped by a swift slash to his neck. So ended the honorable service of [blahblahwhoever].

Hm, that was crappy. Eh. On second thought, these 3rd graders might not like the whole death thing...

One day, a messenger arrived at the palace. His name was Generic Victim, and he had an urgent message for the emperor. "All of the rice has been stolen, Oh Wise One! Whatever shall we do!" The emperor, a clever man, came up with an idea at once. "Let's scour the whole of the empire for the missing rice!" Meanwhile, back in his hovel in a mountainside, an old man dropped a large sack of grain to the floor. /I know it was a horrible thing, but what else could I do for my overly-large family? We would surely perish without this food./ thought the man.

AND THEN THE RICE IS FOUND AND THERE'S A HUGE FEAST AND THE OLD GUY IS INVITED AND EVERYONE IS HAPPY (EXCEPT THE GUY'S FAMILY, THEY ALL DIE) THE END

Argh, oh well.

 

[Kuzmich]

Its almost decent.
how about mine.
The sword pierced his stomach, but Yamamoto endured the pain, he knew he was about to die, so he used what strength was left in him and slashed his enemy across the chest. Then darkness took him.

 

[R[s]T]

i like the rice story!

I FINISHED! NOW ALL I NEED IS A TITLE!

 

[Rock_on]

Originally posted by RT
i have to write a chilrdrens story about feudalism in japan during mideval times, any ideas? i cant have booze sex, crazy hot girls or secks.

thats funney, i have not read a childrens book yet tht doesnt contain all of those..

 

[l33t bunny master]

damn you finished already.. I was gonna write you up a nice long one cuz I had nothing else to do.

 

[x42bn6]

I'm afraid if you try to make children understand feudalism in Japan, you are doomed.

 

[R[s]T]

i got a c+ i think i should of got a bit higher, teacher said its bad cause ONE guy died...\


heres my story, rate it

SPart 1

The Rising Sun

Emperor Yamamoto looked out his palace, watching the sun rise. It sure was

beautiful he thought Tired and fatigue, he spend most of his days and nights making sure

his samurai were ready for the 5 day’s journey across the valleys and into battle. Kiaoto

failed to repaid the On he owed. Yamamoto was insulted, and betrayed. His most loyal

servant was Kiaoto. He rebelled against him, only the ones who want to die insults the

royal Yamamoto family.

Emperor Yamamoto began his journey to find Kiaoto and his men during sunset.

It will be a five days journey. He and his samurai traveled on horseback. His samurai

were confident, and proud, two critical aspects to win the war. They were also loyal and

honorable, they would give up there lives in a second for the emperor. This made

Yamamoto very confident, he was sure he will win the battle when he approach Kiaoto,

and he will take his sword as a prize. However, his arrogance blinded him. He has no

idea on how many men Kiaoto has or how they fight. With Yamamoto is two-hundred-

and-fifty strong.

Four days past, most of Yamamoto’s men were tired from the journey. They were

nearing their enemy. Some wanted to go back, but their honor kept them going. Even

Yamamoto was tired, but he swore an oath to himself, that he will have Kiaoto’s sword.











Part 2

The Surprise

Seven moon’s chase, they finally caught up with the rebels. Kiaoto made an

encampment near the valleys. Yamamoto was surprised how many men were with

Kiaoto. He had around one-hundred and fifty men. Yamamoto ordered his men to

surround the encampment during night time. They would attack when the enemy is

vulnerable.

Flaming arrows soars through the sky, like a hundred meteors. Their tents burned.

What was surprising was Kiaoto’s men seemed to be expecting the attack. A small group

of reinforcement arrived and the enemy got out of their burning tents all clad in armor.

Even with the group of reinforcements, the enemy was small, but they were very, very

well trained. Better than any enemy Yamamoto ever fought. They seemed to know his

every strategy and have a counter against everyone of it. Kiaoto must of learned from

him while he served for Yamamoto. This angered Yamato greatly. He should of killed

Kiaoto when he had his chance.

Yamamoto was loosing his men, so was Kiaoto. Yamamoto fought with all he

had. He took the lives of five men. Arrows were coming from every direction, it was

unpredictable where the next arrow would land. The battle was a massacred.

A glimpse made Yamamoto smiled with joy, he spotted his victim.









Part 3

The Heart of Battle

Kiaoto was there, with no one next to his side. Yamamoto made a dash for him,

closing toward him, and killing all who got in his way. Then all of a sudden, a very sharp

pain hit his left shoulder. Searing with pain, he fought on. He felt his left arm going

numb. He must slay Kiaoto for honor. He called for his men to aid him at his side. Two

came. Yamamoto could see the flames, dancing, everywhere. He was so close to Kiaoto,

soon he would have the prize he seeks, soon. His two comrades, one at each side,

followed him, and were ready to die for the emperor. They both fought on, on their

emperor’s sides, until they both served their purpose.

Now Yamamoto and Kiaoto were facing one another. The winner of the duel will

win the war. Yamamoto fought fiercly, so did Kiaoto. He never seen or knew Kiaoto

had such skills with the sword. It was a long battle. Other soldiers would come to aid the

two fighting men, and die. Yamamoto blocked three blows toward him, doing his best to

ignore the arrows pierced into his flesh. Then a huge bang was heard, Yamamoto was

distracted for a minute and Kiaoto took this to his advantage, he knocked away

Yamamoto’s arm and stabbed him into the gut. The sword pierced his stomach, but

Yamamoto endured the pain, death is inevitable now, but he kept his honor, he used what

strength was left in him and slashed his Kiaoto across the chest while the sword was still

pierced inside of him. He took his revenge, and the darkness took him. Kiaoto was still alive,

bleeding to death. Almost all of his men were killed. He knew the battle was lost. He took

his last breathe and performed hara-kiri, he rather die than be captured.





dont says its g hey, i spent and hour on it

 

[dP]

a little off topic- what is feudalism?

 

[aphextwin]

something to do with politics.....

god rst :\ did u rite that before? or just now

 

[Kuzmich]

what grade are you in?

 

[R[s]T]

garde 8???? im screwed... i dont have cultural aspects