Starcraft: Post brood war

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Starcraft: post brood war
section one

Ten seconds... Thats all the time Zack had to wait for the newly designed Thorium class nuclear warhead to launch. He kept his laser guider steady, the zerglings were getting close. Five seconds... The zerglings would be on him soon. Three...two...one... Zack sprinted off as fast as his hostile-environment suit could handle. He jumped down between two rocks and waited. A flash, like lightning... Then the thunder.

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A few minutes later a drop-ship skimmed over the ground looking for the lone ghost. A flare shot up and the drop-ship landed near the rocks.
“Looks like you could use a lift, son†The fearless pilot said.
“I could have walked...†Zach responded sarcastically.
“Whatever, get your sorry hide in here and hold on!†The drop-ship fired its vertical thrusters and then accelerated to its top speed, the zerg would return. Even a great victory like this would be short lived. Ever since Kerrigan became ruler of the Zerg Terrans had been suffering.
“SHIT! Hold on boys we have multiple contacts closing in fast!†The pilot yelled. Three mutalisks, though damaged from the nuke, were chasing the drop-ship and wouldn’t stop even if it meant following it to hell. The pilot dived into a canyon and fired the ship’s afterburners. Even with the extra boost the drop-ship was too slow to get away. The first mutalisk closed in and fired a glave worm at the ship. The pilot looped up, the worm following. Flew straight at another one of the mutalisks barely avoiding it. Unfortunately for the mutalisk the glave worm did not miss and punctured a soft point in the creature’s armor and teared apart the central nervous system.
“Yeeeehaw! One down, bet you ain’t seen piloting like that before!†The pilot said joyfully.
“We still got two more closing in on us! Don't get ****y yet!†Zach yelled.
The drop-ship flew through the canyon with the mutalisks screaming behind it. The drop-ship dove to go under a natural tunnel. Zack fired a high-powered explosive shell at the center of the arching stone. The drop ship skimmed under as one mutalisk slammed into the rock leaving an ugly smear.
“Eat that you flying scum bag!†Zach taunted.
“One more, I hope we got one last trick up our sleeves!†The pilot responded worriedly.
The mutalisk launched a glave worm at the drop-ship. This one hit and destroyed an engine. The drop-ship started to lose altitude when three wraiths came screaming over head. They ripped the mutalisk to ribbons.
“Thanks for the help captain!†The drop-ship pilot said thankfully.
“Why am I so ood?†The Wraith captain responded ****ily.
 

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Nice man, i like it. The only problem i can sense is that you spelt Zach as Zack in the first sentence. That and a few grammar problems, other than that, nice work for a prologue-type start.
 

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I'd have to agree with Renzo, there. You've got a good start there. My only gripe is a few gramarical errors. You should read back through it and make sure it sounds like you want it to.
 

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Can a mod move this to fanfiction?

Btw, nice man :)
 

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Yeah that's where it was created =/

Ok story though...
 

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Ok I'm gonna update it soon... gotta get around to doing it... been obsessed with SC lately... when I woke up today I tried to build SCVs only to discover that it was real life :D
 

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