God's tears.

[cnbrood]

Running in the rain
To store for a pack of cigarette
drenched by the rain
It was my hair

Returninig to this small house
I lit a cegarette
To calm my mind

Smoke rising up through the air
Blured my vision
I thought I saw a lost temple
lied on that old land
There an old man stood in the corner
He said
"All the people died in the war,inclueding my family
I am the only survivor.
I dont know who I can blame"

The rain came down in torrents
with the lightning
flashing arcoss the dark sky
I thought I saw god's tears fell to the ground

With a hopeless sigh
the old man turned away
He faded away into the rain
To leave his homeland To leave his homestead
I thought I saw god's tears fell to the ground

 

[PauseBreak]

Cool, thought it was okay?

 

[cnbrood]

thank you.I wrote it down a few days ago.I am not sure if it has some grammar mistakes..I am learning english.why not give me some suggestions.

 

[Magikarp]

I am learning english

今后我们就是你永远的家

 

[cnbrood]

今后我们就是你永远的家

Thank you ~~~~~~~~~~ you speak chinese?really good.
谢谢～～～～～～～～～～～～～ 你　说　　　汉语．真是太好了．

 

[Fei_Rushes]

very well put for someone with english as a second language. Looks like you edited most errors, just change the word 'fell' to 'fall' and your good.

 

[x42bn6]

A spelling check would do quite well, but for an English second-language speaker, not bad.*