Empty December

[CutterGirl15]

My newest poem called Empty December

Crystalized tears frozen in place,
Like delicate snowflakes weaved in lace.
It's hard to forget the memories within,
They burn endless screaming of sin.
At a solitary standstill I'll always remember,
The painful regrets of this Empty December.

 

[RuneyPoo]

It is a sad poem on my end, makes me think of last december when I had everything I ever wanted and needed in my life. But this december was very lonely, I didn't have Trish no more, I didn't have the love I had from before. -Sighs-

I rate it 9/10, I admire it.

 

[minny]

wow I couldnt write anything that good.

 

[Kitty]

This is quite beautiful in my opinion. It flows nicely, I like the rhyme scheme. Your word choices are good [Like "snowflakes," for example] since they make everything sound so delicate and frail and it really adds to the poem.

 

[RuneyPoo]

This is quite beautiful in my opinion. It flows nicely, I like the rhyme scheme. Your word choices are good [Like "snowflakes," for example] since they make everything sound so delicate and frail and it really adds to the poem.

To many big words for me to comprehend... But I feel like I agree with you...

 

[Magikarp]

The poem is too cliche, the rhyming seems a bit too forced, and it tries too hard to be melancholy. Watch, I'll make one:

The pain inside expands like a flame
Though defeated, still not tame
I trudge through my own dark soul
Though complete, still not whole
I remember the agony that I've caused
Life slows down, as if on pause

Sorry, but a good poem should have at least a half hour's worth of effort put into it.

 

[Pains Requiem]

i like the last one..
dunno why but i just do...

i had a poem that would have fitted in with this thread- if i can find it or remember it ill post it.